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bonjour, est ce qu'il serait possible que vous m'aider ? j'ai écrit un oral en anglais et j'aimerais avoir votre avis, sur le contenu si ce n'est pas un hors sujet, si il y a des fautes, s'il vous plaît. Merci


Oral presentation for Monday 8th:



1- You are a transhumanist taking part in a conference. Make a 2 minute speech to promote transhumanism.



Your presentation should

• contain capacity in the past, present and future // and vocab from the unit (make sure you read again the different exercises you've done)

• be clear (you can use the online app naturalreaders.com to help with pronunciation)

• be well-argued and convincing (use examples to prove your point)

• be entertaining (don't bore the audience)



Record yourself and drop your file on my ENT rack.



Ladies and gentlemen, welcome to tomorrow's future. My name is Doctor Johns, I'm a neurologist ans a scientist. Before I tell you about tomorrow's future, I will tell you about the past and the present. When I was a child, I was passionate about human evolution, especially prehistory. I wondered all mornings how our species could evolve from mere primate to present-day man and to understand this, I was persuaded that I had to become an archaeologist. But I was wrong, I didn't want to understand past history but rather to know what drove the human to evolve.

There isn't right or wrong answer, but in my opinion, the people we are today are the culmination of our ancestors wanting to meet the needs of man. I became a scientific neurologist to continue what our predecessors began. That is, to evolve the human being. As we can see, technology is part of us. We all have a phone, a computer, a washer… . However, some people discredit these devices. What people see as negative in these devices and this evolution, I see hope. You must wonder why hope. Because thanks to science, inventors and many others, we give hope in many areas. Today I’m going to talk about one area in particular: medicine. In two centuries, life expectancy has tripled from 25 years in 1750 to over 80 years today. The infant mortality rate has also decreased. These were possible thanks to the evolution of medicine with vaccine, medical equipment, more qualified personnel. Today with the state-of-the-art equipment at our disposal, we give to disability hope like the blind, people who have lost their leg or arm, people with cancer, through implants connected to optic nerves, prostheses like bionic leg or bionic arm or treatments. Thus with help of its devices or treatments, we want to meet the needs of these people but above all we want to give and make available the necessary care, to enable them to fulfill their dream and to give them hope in life.

As I said before, this desire to advance the human being, can be categorized in a movement called trans-humanism, that is to say how to influence, improve, intervene on human evolution but also how to exceed the boundaries to the beyond the average man by improving it. For example, in recent years, many researchers have been looking for ways to stop aging or have much longer life-span, increase in our QI, our muscle capacity because despite numerous technical advances, humans remain weak with short life-span, a diminishing health as we age and a drop in cognitive capacities. It is clear that this will happen one day, but for now, we must focus on current problems, such as cancer or incurable disease… in order to meet other needs one day and to enable the people of tomorrow to find a solution so that people can no longer die of illness.

We therefore invite you to reflect on the fact that the human is in perpetual becoming and to continue with us this fight, this will to heal man, to improve him and to see his evolution. Because those are our choices that will create our future and that of our children.



Sagot :

Réponse :

Ladies and gentlemen, welcome to tomorrow's future. My name is Doctor Johns, I'm a neurologist and a scientist. Before I talk about tomorrow's future, I will speak about the past and the present. When I was a child, I was passionate about human evolution, including prehistory. I used to wonder how our species could evolve to become what we are today. To understand this, I decided to become an archaeologist. But I was mistaken, I didn't want to deepen my understanding in past history but rather to do so in how humans evolved.

There is no right or wrong answer, in my opinion, our people today are the pinnacle of ancestors who wish to meet human needs. I became a scientific neurologist and continued the work of our predecessors. In other words, we must develop human beings. As we can see, technology is part of our lives. We all have phones , computers and washers.  However, some people discredit these devices. In my opinion by the way, I see hope, and why hope? Because of science, inventors and many others, we have given hope in many fields. Today, I will specifically discuss one area: medicine. In two centuries, life expectancy has increased from 25 years in 1750 to more than 80 years today, which has tripled. The infant mortality rate has also decreased. These were possible thanks to the evolution of medicine with vaccine, medical equipment, more qualified personnel.Today with the state-of-the-art equipment at our disposal, we give to disability hope, to the blind, people who have lost their leg or arm, to the people with cancer and through implants connected to optic nerves, prostheses like bionic leg or bionic arm or treatments. Therefore, we hope to use their equipment or treatment to meet the needs of these people, but the most important thing is that we give and provide the necessary care to enable them to realize their dreams and bring hope to their lives. As I said before, this desire to advance the human being, can be categorized in a movement called trans-humanism, which means how to influence, improve, intervene on human evolution but also how to exceed the boundaries to the beyond the average man by improving it.

For example, in recent years, many researchers have been looking for ways to stop aging or prolong life, increase our QI and our muscle capacity, because despite many advancements in technology, human life is still short but still weak, which is gradually decreasing As you grow older and become healthier, your cognitive ability declines.  Obviously this will happen in a day, but at present, we must focus on current problems, such as cancer or incurable diseases... so that one day to meet other needs, and make people tomorrow find a solution so that people can no longer die disease.

Therefore, we invite you to reflect on the fact that human beings live forever and continue to fight this battle with us, which will heal humanity, improve humanity and see human evolution. Because these are our choices and will create the future for us and our children.

Ton speech est super mais j'ai reformulez quelque phrases pour que sa soit excellent! Voila, j'espere que sa vous aides. Ah oui, les phrases ou mot que j'ai soulignes sont se que j'ai changer  

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