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J'aimerais bien que vous me corrigiez 
C'est un itinéraire touristique :
" I suggest you to begin with the visit of Parliemant Hill wich is th elocation of the first public march for gay rights. Subsequently we will visit the Canadien War museum where we will see war's machine. Then we will make U-turn to go at the Beckta Dining and Wine who is a really good restaurant. We will finish our afternoons in the Garden of the Provinces and territories where we will relax with the landscape. We will return to the Minto Suite Hotel where we will eat and sleep ! "

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I suggest (that) you (should) begin by visiting the Parliament Hill which is the location...

Pour le verbe suggest, ne jamais utiliser la forme I suggest you to do... Les mots entre parenthèses ne sont pas nécessaires.

the location of the first March for Gay Rights... N'oublie pas les majuscules ;)
A la place de 'subsequently, j'utiliserais 'then' car sinon ça sonne un peu formel pour un discour.

War machine = les forces armées. Tu veux plutôt dire 'weapons and military devices'

Beckta Dining and Wine which is a really good restaurant.  ==> Who c'est pour une personne

Where we will relax by watching the landscape..