Réponse:
Malory was born in Marseille fifth of April two thousand five. Now he is sixteen years old; he measures 1.80 meters high, has red hair and green eyes.
He is a courageous young man, devoted to his family, and has a great sense of justice.
He lives in a beautiful house with his family. He spends his days swimming, sailing his boat.
When he sails by boat he likes to see beautiful landscapes.
accident
One day, he takes his boat and sails the Mediterranean Sea. That day Malory goes to the Frioul Islands, but there is a storm, and he falls off the boat and vanishes into the sea. He is saved by a man who brings him to a cave. The man who saved him is a sorcerer of the sea, he will give his magic powers to him, so that he does not die.
a super hero's life
After the accident, Malory learned to become a real superhero.
First of all in thanks to his magic powers. He can control algae and all marine vegetation, it controls water, it can create oxygen bubbles that allow him to breathe underwater, and he can also walk on water.
He has a disguise of three different colors:
blue, the color of the sea
yellow, the color of sand
and green, the color of algae.
He also coined his superhero name,
"Moseiron" he was inspired by Poseidon, the god of the sea and the oceans.
Méchant
unfortunately, Marseille is full of supervillains. They live in the depths of the sea. The wicked seek to conquer Marseille and turn them into fish.
Moseiron must therefore protect the city with the help of his powers. He must show courage and determination to fight the villains, and protect his identity.
C'est la version corrigée. Tu utilises trop souvent "he", essaye de trouver d'autre moyen pour présenter le héro