Bonjour, pouvez vous me corriger les fautes svp
last october I went to
Bellewaerde. it is an
amusement park in Belgium. I
went there with my best
friend. as soon as we arrived,
we were on big rides: the
roller coaster, the ghost train,
a raft..
While waiting for the
attraction, my friend and I
started to stress because we
are afraid of the loops. during
the ride, my friend lost her
phone. she was sad. I helped
him look for his phone and
when we found it it was
broken. she was most sad.
when she left she was crying
and the staff were sad for her
so people offered us cotton
candy


Sagot :

Bonjour, :)

Réponse :

Last October I went to Bellewaerde.

Bellewaerde is an amusement park in Belgium.

I went there with my best friend Clara ( or the name of your best friend).

As soon as we arrived to the Bellewaerde park, we started running towards the biggest rides: the roller coaster, the ghost train, a raft...

While waiting for the attraction, my friend and I

started to become more and more anxious because we were afraid of the loops.

During the ride, my friend lost her phone.

She was terrified. Me and my best friend started to look for her phone and when we found it it was all broken.

She so sad that she started crying.  People saw how sad my best friend was saw they brought me and Clara ( or the name of your best friend) cotton candy.

Alors j'ai un peu changé ton histoire parce que ça n'avait aucun sens en anglais, j'espère que ça ne te dérange pas ?

Maintenant, il y a quelque chose de vraiment important qui existe dans toutes les langues : lorsque vous commencez une phrase, veuillez la commencer par une lettre en majuscule. Merci :)

Voil@, en espérant vous avoir aidé et n'hésitez pas à poser d'autres questions si besoin. :)