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Bonjour ! Ceci est notre partie a moi et ma pote en anglais pour notre oral du brevet. Pouvez vous nous corriger ? ( Theme: le stage , les P et N en début de phrase sont nos initales).
Merci !

P: Our motivations for the internship were that we liked the trade environment, exchanging with
customers, seeing if we could be interested in trade.
N: We had a lot of trouble finding an internship in commerce, we started looking too late. Pauline's
sister had already done an internship there, so we called her and she told us it was okay.
P: From the first day we had difficulties. When we arrived at the internship, nobody knew that we
were on an internship and the boss hadn't told them.
N: So the first day we did nothing,we just observed. We started doing tasks on the second day.
P:Our company is located in a chocolate factory in town.
N: The name of the chocolate factory is "le comptoir de Mathilde" created by Richard Fournier. The
company is in the trade field.
P:There are currently 8 employees.

Sagot :

Réponse:

  1. Le texte est bien formulé, juste le moment où vous dites le nom de la chocolaterie, les employés etc, vaut mieux le mettre au début parce que parler de l'entreprise à la fin c'est pas le mieux.
EMALDELAS

Réponse : C'est corrigé! :)

Explications :

P: Our motivations for the internship were that we liked the trade environment, exchanging with Customers, seeing if we could be interested in a trade.

N: We had a lot of trouble finding an internship in commerce, we started looking too late. Pauline's Sister had already done an internship there, so we called her and she told us that it was okay.

P: On the first day we had difficulties. When we arrived, nobody knew that we were on an internship and the boss hadn't told them.

N: So the first day we did nothing, we just observed. We started doing tasks on the second day.

P: Our company is located in a chocolate factory in town.

N: The name of the chocolate factory is "le comptoir de Mathilde" created by Richard Fournier. The company is in the trade field.

P: There are currently 8 employees.