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Bonjour !! je dois écrire une rédaction sur mes vacances de Pâques en anglais. est-ce que quelqu'un pourrait m'aider à corriger mes fautes ou enrichir mon texte ? merciiiii d'avance :)

My Easter holidays was funny,
i went to cinéma with my brother and my mother for watch Sonic 2. The movie was great and pop-corn was Yummy. Then I went to zoo with my parents, we saw beautiful butterflies. The weather was really nice. The next day, we went to bowling because it was raining. There was a lot of people but it was cool. I did shopping with my family to louvain. I wanted to go to Starbucks but we didn't have time. It was sunny.
On sunday, it was birthday's dad. He was 43, we ate chocolate cake. It was amazing because everybody was in a good mood. We went to royal greenhouse. We saw a lot of flowers, it was beautiful. On monday, i wished to go to the skatepark with my father, unfortunately the weather was bad and we had a drink (boire un verre mais jsp comme le dire ). Finally, I tidied up my bedroom and I sold books. I got 18 euros. I was so happy.


j'espère que je n'ai pas trop fait de faute..​

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bonjour tu avais fait 2-3 petite faute mais voilà c corriger et j’ai rajouter une petite phrase.


My Easter holidays was funny,
I went to cinéma with my brother and my mother for watch Sonic 2. The movie was great and pop-corn was Yummy. Then I went to zoo with my parents, we saw beautiful butterflies. The weather was really nice. The next day, we went to bowling because it was raining. There was a lot of people but it was cool. I did shopping with my family to Louvain. I wanted to go to Starbucks but we didn't have time. It was sunny. On sunday, it was birthday's my dad. He is 43 , we ate chocolate cake. It was amazing because everybody was in a good mood and my whole family was there.
We went to royal greenhouse. We saw a lot of flowers, it was beautiful. On monday, i wished to go to the skatepark with my father, unfortunately the weather was bad and we had a drink Finally, I tidied up my bedroom and I sold books. I got 18 euros. I was so happy.

my Easter holidays were so funny, I went to the movies with my family and we watched Sonic 2 ! The movie was so good! Then, I went to the zoo with my parents, we say beautiful animals. The weather was good so I was kind of in a good mood. The next day, it was raining, so bowling was the only funny solution, the arcade was really full but it didn’t disturb me that much. After this, my family and I went shopping and we bought a bunch of clothes. I wanted to go to Starbucks but we didn’t have time so I couldn’t get my drink. Sunday was my dad’s birthday, he is now 43, his cake was so good and everybody was happy. We went to Royal Greenhouse and saw lots of flowers, I really liked it. The weather was bad monday so I couldn’t go to the skatepark with my dad, but we went to a café and had a drink. Finally, I cleaned my room and sold some books to gain some money and I gained 18€, I was so happy ! So my vacations were really good and I’m really satisfied !