Bonjour j'ai un texte a écrire sur une femme qui adresse un dernier message a son marie avant d'immigré au USA.

merci a la personne qui prendra le temps de coriger mon texte.
merci encore
voici mon texte:

Hello Rodriguez, by the time you read this letter I will probably already be at the border between Mexico and the United States.


As you already know, I have been thinking about it for several years but I finally made my decision, I am tired of this poverty, I don't think I can survive in Mexico, nor do I have the strength to continue the life I have been leading until now.


that's why i'm leaving and risking my life because i want to succeed, because i want to have a better life, i want to be able to finish the studies that i've always dreamed of and that i haven't had the chance to achieve, so that i can offer this life to you too.


I know it's reckless and dangerous but it's not a bad thing, think of all the money I'll earn so we can finally have a house and a family


two beautiful children and a cat. So all I want you to remember is that you don't have to be sad.


the american dream that i have been dreaming about for a long time will soon be a reality for both of us. finally i have a request for you i know it's selfish but could you wait for me until i get back? because i will continue to survive and think about you despite the borders that separate us because you and Mexico will always have a place in my heart.


Sagot :

M1NAX

Réponse :

salut!! ton texte est vraiment bien mais j'ai remarqué quelques incohérances : l5 : "nor"?? et puis aussi its reckless and dangerous ?? qu es ce qui est dangereux ?? l'amérique? pourquoi? aussi ligne 24-25 il faut que tu précises que c'est ce que tu souhaites, sinon on ne comprend pas très bien! sinon parfais, et bonne chance!!!

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