VIOLONISTEFARFELUE
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Bonsoir!^^
je voudrais votre avis sur mon dm d'anglais niveau 3eme ,mon sujet et en lien et ci dessous ma réponse.
SUJET B
Hey my name is Kevin ,I have 8years and I live in Soweto with my little family. My mother was missing since a long time and I inhabit with my father and my new mother.I have a sister Kelly,but they are different for me. When I get out of the house ,the other poeple felt unconfortable when looking at me and every day , a unknown insulte me.Once time , I was in a shop ,the withe poeple enter an he toggled me and I saw him pointing his gun at the teller. He killed her.
And it's like this every day.
I'm scared of the police,because I’m sur, my mother was arrested by the policeman Because I am different,because I am a very-light kids.
Voila qu'en penser vous,ais-je bien respecter le sujet?

Bonsoir Je Voudrais Votre Avis Sur Mon Dm Danglais Niveau 3eme Mon Sujet Et En Lien Et Ci Dessous Ma Réponse SUJET B Hey My Name Is Kevin I Have 8years And I Li class=

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JAIMELESANIMES
Salut ! Je pense que tu as bien respecté le sujet mais il y a des fautes dans ton DM comme : I’m 8 years old,when they looking at me, insult me , I’m sure, and et tu peux peut être remplacer I have a sister Kelly avec I have a sister named/ called Kelly ( sinon ça veut dire quoi « withe » ? )
CELINEKANJ
Salut je trouve que il est très bien fait mais il y a des fautes comme
I’m 8 years old
And we don’t say once time but either one time or once
People not poeple
You used single forme and plural forme in the same sentence so I would say maybe a white person entered and he toggled me, (replace the and) I saw him pointing...
Sure not sur
You used because a lot of time in this sentence so you should replace it with like the reason is that....
And we don’t say since a long time ago it’s missing a long time ago if you have one sister you should say but she is different
(When I get out of the house the other people felt ....) you should replace the verbe felt in the past simple by feel in the present simple because you used get that is in the present simple so you need to choose one tense
If you’d like you can also say and it is a routine that keeps on going in stead of and it’s like this every day (btw just giving ideas)
Hope I helped