MANU16
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bonjour oouvez vous corriger mes erreurs si il y en a?
Hi today im gonna talk about simone biles She's a black american artistic gymanst.
she's twenty-three,born on forteen march nineteen-ninety-seven .she's Have won a total of twenty-four Olympic and World Championship medals, she's the most decorated American gymnast
With four Olympic gold medals, set a new American record for most gold medals in women’s gymnastics at a single game.
She's a model for me 'cause gym is my favourite sport but to become what it's, she had surpass herself and i enjoy it.she really looks really cool.
-she was adopted and she has two brother
merci d'avance♡

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HETTYHAYS
Voilà, il y a pas beaucoup de fautes:
....born on the fourteenth of March....
....she has won....
....she set....
....for me because gymnastics is but to become what she is she had to surpass..
...two brothers...
CLEMENCEGRN8

Réponse:

"Going to" serai plus poli pour de l'écrit, "gymnast" et non pas "gymanst", on dirai plutôt "she won" sans le "have", " 'cause" est familier contrairement à "because", et "but to become what it's" ne veut rien dire il faudrait dire "and to be what she's now" et la dernière faute est brother doit être au pluriel vu qu'elle a 2 frères donc "brothers".

Voila, je ne sais pas si tu as fait d'autre faute mais il y a déjà cette petite correction sur quoi tu peux compter. Je te souhaite bonne chance si c'est un oral !! Bonne journée.